ohhh i noticed the grammatical errors too. i think since this is the first release, they will fix those bugs in the future. as for Jestyn's rambles,,, i mean he is a jester - his whole role revolves around talking and communication. in that sense, it's a crucial part of his character wouldn't you say ? x3
ah but very nice to hear someone express their opinion about a game
oh this guy is FREAKED OUT haha love it </3
saw an edit on tiktok and (as someone who loves jesters a little too much) i just knew i had to check it out. this was truly a joy to play <3 i loved the art and dynamics between the characters. the whole concept of this vn is simply exquisite and feels like the exact thing i was looking for. MORE JESTER REPRESENTATION IN MEDIA PLEASE. 🗣️🗣️‼️‼️ the people (i) want it. thank you for providing the people with what they want <33
yooo that collar scene with Jestyn had me HOWLING. #Freak4Freak need that
i especially liked how you wrote his characeter - his playfulness but also snide remarks directed at Their Majesty, not to mention the gently providing them with reflection into the choices they've made. really using the full range of what it meant to be a Jester back in the day <3
the secret ending too!! i had already suspected that their old king must have been some kind of tyrant. i cannot wait to see what direction you decide to take this project in :D very interested in how the future plot and character dynamics will develop. i wish you the absolute best with your studies and with the future of this vn!!! thank you for taking the time to create it as well x3 Blessed Be the hands that create.
exquisite meal chef, enjoyed this one a lot 🔥 now personally im a guy but this vn just looked too much of a banger not to play. and im glad i did, it was a joy to play x3 i especially liked your narrative and character writing. now, i hate that fcker lane; what an annoying asshole i hope he dies a slow, agonizing death. but the way you wrote him was very well done ! :D (hate the character, recognize the well-done characterization and all that lol)
think you did an especially great job at writing his casual sexism and toxic male bravado. i've played a lot of vns but not one where the LIs are this 'flawed' and, in a way, realistic. so it was a breath of fresh air. (and! the worldbuilding. god the horrors of working a nightshift at a convenience store as a woman go crazy. someone please give her a gun). it is, again, a breath of fresh air to see a world this flawed and realistic be depicted in vns
the protagonist as well! i always find myself with the problem that some vns tend to write the mc,,, too 'feminine' or emotionally weak, so it's nice to see a protagonist who talks back and doesn't let herself be so blatantly disrespected for a change (you bet ur ass i used every option to slap lane when i could) (more options to beat the sht out of him please)
very intrigued to see what went down between amelia and the mc and who that red helmet belonged to (i already have some theories). overall, enjoyed the atmosphere of the game a lot <3 the art, narrative and characterization... very looking forward to see what chef decides to cook up next 🔥
i wish you the best of luck with this project and hope it turns out how you envisioned it! x3
(also biker boyyyy my babygirllll god he's so cute)
i of course understand that there are real-life people with obligations and a whole life of their own behind the work. and, thank you for taking the time to create it btw as someone who holds a lot of respect for artists, i appreciate it. yet i do not personally (and this could just be me lol) think my comment was a 'negative comment' or insensitive. i tried not to come off as mean or rude because i simply wanted to share my honest opinion. and i'll hold it wasn't so. but well, doesn't matter.
i do wish you guys the best for in the future with ur games :3
thank you! i think so too. i see too many comments glazing and straight-up globering on games (mostly because the characters are hot) when in reality, the game and writing itself is not that,,,, it.
it doesn't help the devs either (especially not if they plan to further work and improve the game) if all they see is overly praise and no actual constructive criticism. i say we should share our honest, objective opinions with them more often.
BANGER GAME ALERTTTTTTT
and all of this done in such a short amount of time too ⁉️
ok well, where do we start? i'm grateful that i haven't struggled with mental health as much, but i do hold a very deep sympathy for Bunnie and all those who struggle with such issues, i like how you constructed their story and struggles. also in love with the concept of just. two bunny dudes popping up on your birthday like "heyyy wsp shawty hehehe" the dialogue you wrote for this vn was very entertaining to read <3
i also rlly enjoyed the amount of freedom you gave us with the choices. i always appreciate it when creators give their players... well, room to play lol. the OSTs you constructed for this were simply lovely and when i first opened the screen to click start and heard it, i was like "oh. oh-" because i find your voice extremely lovely and like how you construct the melodies
i also just love the way you construct these music pieces for your games. i find it very special that you do and it makes,,, me appreciate the story and all the hard work you put into it even more <3
the art and voice acting !! Blythe's androgynous design was very charming and pretty, and i enjoyed how expressive they were (both in the art and voice acting) i also found myself really digging Bunnie's design. i personally haven't seen a lot of poc in vns so that was a very nice thing to see <3
i immensely enjoyed listening to your rambles and the inspiration behind the story - it adds another layer of depth to the story for me, which i really appreciate
ahh this is a very unorganized thought-ramble and it's very late, but i just had to sing you my praises because you deserve it. exquiste meal chef give me 14 more 🗣️🗣️‼️‼️
fun for a short ride but seemed to lack depth. the variety of endings is nice, but the dialogue exchange between us and the characters feels rather,,, empty. it doesn't feel like we develop any sort of emotional connection with them before reaching an ending. also the mc's actions feel,,, too emotionally reactive-driven (himbo/bimbo vibes you could say), though that could just be a personal pet peeve of mine lol
yooo this was (pleasantly) longer than i expected for an alpha version, shit fire 🗣️🔥‼️‼️ very fun, loved it<3 i liked the number of options you give us, and the dynamics between the characters. miro is (regrettably) a cutie 😭❤️ also the music in this is a bangerrr exellent music choices chef absolutely delightful yumyumyum
can't wait to see what else u cook up x3
been looking to play this one for a while because the sypnosis caught mt attention. this was fun x3 the visuals ! the voice acting ! the atmosphere !
Styx is absolutely lovely and i especially liked their outfit and them in ending shuddering, alive and home :D
i really dig the art style. if you wouldn't mind, what's the artist's name/socials? i found they're named as 'Mikei' in the credits but that's pretty vague; there was no link or anything :( thx ^^
"be not afraid" sir this is the sexiest moment of my life
but for real though. even though it is short, you guys still managed to create such a wonderful work <3 the stained glass bg art... the regal This One... the orchestral music... the absolutely fabulous voice acting and writing...
in love with the way you guys designed and drew This One, it feels so regal and divine. the writing of its character... it really makes me curious about what This One went through; it adds a sort of mystique to the shadow of its character which i found very lovely.
great work, almost poetic </3 thank you all for the hard work you put into this!
what is this LMAOO 😭😭
i played it not knowing what to expect, and even though it was on the shorter side, it made me crack up a lot! had lots of fun playing it x3 the way i had to steel myself for that 'UNLEASH THE BEAST' option lmaoo AND OH MY GOD THE SOUNDS. WHY WERE THE SOUNDS SO VIVID OH GOD
the (you weren't lying) horrible dialogue options had me cracking up. oh and the art! hensley was a cutie, who wouldn't fall for a face and gentle demeanor like that lol your art style is beautiful <3 i liked how soft it looks,,, almost like watercolor?
anyways chef cooked on this one 🔥🔥
how can i describe this story that would properly do it justice ? just like It Paints Me, this one too, is hauntingly beautiful—from the art, atmosphere, writing, the BEAUTIFUL gui (absolutely enamored with the way you formatted the vn) and almost about everything else. yet, this one feels... more melancholic, in a sort of way.
i am a big fan of the concept of death, ghosts, passing, memento mori, and just about everything in that sort of vine ; i think it's beautiful. and this vn, in a way,,, encompasses all that.
the story pulled me in a way i didn't expect. the fouth ending genuinely made me shed some tears, i found it beautiful. and the third ending too (and of course i had to get the other two endings as well; so with a heavy heart i was mean to the ghost girl... edith i'm so sorry :(()
this is just,,, such a melancholic and lovely, poetic work of art and oh my stars BLESS your hands for creating it. thank you for this, sincerely. it touched my soul in a very subtle way, and i will always remember it. thank you for your hard work and for creating it <33
i hope whatever chaos you've been going through can calm down a little bit and you can catch a break soon >.< also don't worry about putting too much pressure on yourself for our sake! if you ever need more time to work on the vn, of course we will understand x3! for the chef to be able to cook and serve, the chef themself needs to be doing well 🙏
after all, balancing life is not easy >.> anyways! hope you are taking proper care of yourself. eating and drinking water and all that jazz :} wishing u lots of luck x3 !
it's been a year daddy
i really really miss you
mommy said you went to the store to get some milk
broooo hope you are doing well and life is treating you kindly. i worry and i hope you know everytime i check itchio i cross both my fingers and toes (YES my toes too) and hope to see an update from you on my feed. anyways hope your year is coming along smoothy so far x3!
lots of love from a random stranger in the internet <3
i really wasn't sure what to expect when first playing this, all i could think about was "WHY IS THIS DUDE SPEAKING IN RIDDLES WTF WHAT DOES ANY OF WHAT HE SAYS MEAN" but anyways!
really did enjoy myself with this one, especially with the director's cut ending. i personally found it very funny and wholesome <3
and looking through the extra content was quite fun too, especially your rambles. i don't know, i enjoyed them. it's always nice to watch someone talk about something they are passionate about
thank you for this short jam! and for the work you put into it ; will def check out more of your stuff. <3
something that i can only describe as hauntingly beautiful— the art, which looks like a real life painting itself; messy yet tender brushstrokes that create a dark, melancholic atmosphere. the story and dialogue, haunting and dreamy at the same time. the voice acting, gentle but dipped in poetic rawness in all the right ways.
more than a story it's a work of art ; a chilling painting come alive.
ahhh idk how you did it but this is absolutely stunning <3 im looking very forward to checking out more of your other works. thank you for this precious work of art!
thank you for the reply, i appreciate it ^^
i read your comment and see your point— for calling it constructive criticism, it does feel too heated lol. i'll change it so it doesn't sound too 'mean' or 'rude' as that wasn't my intention while writing it.
i hope the work of your vn comes along smoothly with the extra help you are now getting :]
don't know what vns you've played, but i'll recommend you some of my favorites where i've really come to enjoy not only the characters but plot as well! hope you do end up checking out some :3
To Eat a God by Soffis_mbm ! it's my fav vn novel because it goes beyond just a romance game; the concept is spectacular, all the characters and their designs are unique, and the WORLDBUILDING simply pulls you in. it's a biggie but has lots of dif routes to explore ! :D i especially hope you give this one a play! <3
Watch the Road (DEMO) by mirawakestudios is a great one too. here, the writing and atmosphere really shine through, and if i had to describe it very briefly, it would be 'the nostalgia and melancholy we feel on cold, snowy nights. wouldn't you like to have a deep, long conversation with a stranger and spill your guts?' it's a really lovely (almost poetic) work in progress with lots of alternative endings too, so def worth a check out :3 !
The Winter Wedding by devilinlovegames has been a recent fav of mine - i've personally never seen the concept of the omegaverse used in a vn before so it really drew me in. it has mystery and horror elements with it and is set in a victorian gothic era so it's a very interesting work to check out!
this one isn't a romance vn, but i'll just add it here because it's a masterpiece on its own: Do NOT Take This Cat Home by Pixeliminal. it's about taking (or not) a seemingly cute cat home. mixes cuteness with horror elements very well; the original music has similar vibes to weirdcore / liminal spaces AND has a very thoughtful and almost unexpected deep message at the end.
would geniously love to hear what u think if u ever decide to check any of these out! anyways happy playing Dore :D
some constructive criticism, shall we? :)
the character designs are well-made; points to that. but story-wise, character-wise, and dialogue-wise, it all feels... lacking in some sort of way. keeping it real chat i had a bit of a hard time pulling through this one (but as dev pointed out, this is a work in progress and only the first update)
let's start off with the protagonist - 'us'. the mc feels too much like a y/n from those wattpad fanfics. they come across as overly emotionally reactive, unnecessarily enthusiastic, and almost... too girly (despite this being a supposedly gender-neutral MC). the backstory of the mc - someone who comes from a good family and OBVIOUSLY has money, decides that they want to 'become independent' so they... decide to move to the city and work a minimum wage job as a barista. but also their parents are paying for their (outrageously luxurious-looking) apartment, which... ironically, takes away the entire point of them wanting to become more independent. lol.
it doesn't add up. and it feels downright unrealistic and, by extension, grossly inaccurate since... well, when has a rich person realistically ever thought/acted like this? i can't help but feel there was a much better way to approach and set up the MC's backstory.
the supporting characters in the game come across as not only one-dimensional and overly enthusiastic (which, frankly, gets annoying along the way), but it also feels like their sole purpose in the game is to serve / help the MC in some sort of way, rather than play an actual role in the game. for example, our boss.
of course, not all barista bosses have to be assholes, and it's not impossible to catch a good and kind one out there, but the way her character is presented feels too motherly, and she acts more like a friend, which essentially takes away her professionalism and authority as our boss. especially if you take into account that the MC has just started working there for a couple of weeks. (two weeks if im not mistaken?)
moving on to the dialogue (and what is the biggest issue for this VN in my opinon), it is OVERWHELMINGLY repetitive. it follows a pattern of "(character says one line of dialogue)" [long descriptive description that brings much of nothing] "(another single line of dialogue)" [another overwhelming and unnecessary description].
with this we learn nothing new or useful of the world or its characters, as all the dialogue ever does is state the already obvious. the descriptie lines seem to serve more as empty fluff than actual important information that is relevant to the story. there is also the issue of "it's not just..." being used an overwhelming amount of times, which gets repetitive and tiring as the story goes along.
overall, although the concept/idea of this vn is unique and seems interesting, its rather poor execution takes anything away from it. rather than glazing the game because it has a few hot, fuckable-looking characters in it, it would help more if we could pay more attention to the actual characters, storyline, and dialogue and critique all of them more constructively.
but i also understand this is not the final product, and of course, improvements would be made along the way. no art project starts off perfect, and what is important is that we are able to spot our lacking areas and improve upon them. i wish the creators and dev luck, i hope the final version of this turns out how you envisioned it :]
ahh enjoyed myself a lot with this one! everything from the gorgeous art, dialogue, music and the constant ominous feeling made this vn a joy to play <3 ALSO this is my first time seeing a vn use the concept of the omegaverse for its worldbuilding ?? i was surprised and not sure whtat to expect but damn this turned out a banger.
kitchen on fire cause you guys cooking fr fr 🔥🔥
(also forget about oscar or tristian i want that linden twink)
this one was a ton of fun!<3
loooved the witty responses and the humor in it, kept cracking up at random stuff. there's just too many good bits to choose a fav lmao all the characters have great appealing designs and all their personalities are charming in their own way
but my fav for sure has to be Bob. greedy little fuck though bro is lit mr. Krabs 2.0 like fwym we working for 6 bucks AN HOUR ? id cry during every shift if that were me
super glad i took the hint from Tumblr for this one! :3 :D
nOOOOOO *sniff sniff* *gaws at the bars of my enclosure* my shayla.....
ive become pretty obsessed with this vn recently so i was rlly looking forward to the release :( but still, thank you so much for all the work you seem to be putting in this <3
i hope itch.io changes it's policies soon, devs shouldn't be watering down their great works for some dump pay processors
the art is in this vn is more than beutiful, i rlly like your style! the way you can see all the brushes and how softly the colors mingle together is so lovely. also the vn's ui and music choices are great <3 the only thing that felt off was the diologue, which came off stiff at times. felt there was more 'telling' than 'showing'
anyways, interesting play :]
had a banger of a time playing this game tonight x3 (peak unemployment activities)
it was very fun trying to get all the different endings and unlocking the different dialogues/conversations. the art... paired with the music and writing, is almost,,, poetic ? i loved the mc and Iyan's deep conversations. reminded me of those deep convos you'll have with a friend at 2 am <33 gahh i rlly loved this one, thank you so much for all the hard work you poured into this novel!
ps. jax reacting to the mc pouring salt into their drink was so cute and funny lol x3
THE KITCHEN IS ON FIRE BECAUSE YOU COOKED TOO HARD ON THIS ONE
seeing riven lit made my jaw dropped damn that guy is FINE. also i don't think ive ever seen a dealer! mc in a yandere game before, or anything like this for the matter. it was so interesting to see <3 and the art is so lovely too ahhh
im rlly hooked to see what comes after this <33
